Standout

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Why you?
So many shells washed upon the shore
Ignored, stepped upon, shattered
You… scattered among them
Whole, unscathed, beautiful
You blend in with the crowd
Just another shell… not
There is something about you
Nobody’s rules seem to apply
You just are
And we… bask in your shadow

W3 Prompt #165: Wea’ve Written Weekly poet of the week, Bob, prompts us to write a metaphorical poem that includes the phrase “nobody’s rules,” inspired by his poem “What Remains.” I’m skipping the “brief note” due to time constraints.

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  5. Hi Jennifer – what a beautifully crafted piece! Your use of the shell metaphor is absolutely brilliant – it captures that wonderful mystery of why certain people catch our attention amongst the crowd. The way you’ve structured the poem with those short, breathless lines perfectly mirrors the feeling of being struck by someone’s unique presence. I particularly love how you’ve balanced the harsh realities (“ignored, stepped upon, shattered”) with the gentle reverence for your subject (“whole, unscathed, beautiful”). The phrase “Nobody’s rules seem to apply” is perfectly placed – it captures that sense of someone who transcends ordinary expectations simply by being themselves. Your ending, with “we… bask in your shadow,” is hauntingly beautiful and shows such sophisticated understanding of how truly special people affect others around them. This poem demonstrates real skill in turning a simple observation into something profound and moving.

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