
On the night train there is no hoot hoot hoot hoot of the barred owl or the chirp chirp chirp of cricket stridulation. There is only the rhythmic cha, cha, cha of the wheels on the track. The hypnotic tempo, combined with the undulating motion of the train, gently lulls me to sleep. I do not stir until the glare from the city lights shine upon my face. An incandescent sunrise indicating it is time to depart.
riding the night train
manufactured cadence serves
in lieu of crickets
W3 Prompt #112: Wea’ve Written Weekly poet of the week, Jude Itakali, prompts us to write a haibun using onomatopoeia (x3) on the theme of “the beauty of night.”
Nice one! I enjoyed your poem! ❤
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A perfect haibun … night train indeed!!
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Thank you, Helen! 😊
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Touching haibun, so restful..
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Jennifer, you captured the night sounds on the train perfectly. Wonderful onomatopoeia and the haiku is lovely.
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Thank you, Punam! 😊
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My pleasure. 😊
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“Riding the night train” always gives me vivid images in my mind. Very nice writing.
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Jennifer this one is perfect!! Great response to the prompt!!
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Thank you, Val! 😊
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You put me right inside the train car with you! (K)
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Beautiful and relaxing haibun!
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I really enjoyed your angle. Combining modernity with nature. Beautiful haibun, and that haiku was 👌🏾✨
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I love falling asleep on a night train…
Really enjoyed this, JJJ 💙👏
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Oh! I forgot to mention your amazing haiku! 🚂
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Thank you, Lesley! 😊
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I love this, Jenn! “cha, cha, cha” ~ that’s perfect! And your haiku too! So good!
~David
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Thank you, David!😊
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Hi, Jenn! 👋🏼
Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by the heartful, lovely Sarah David is now live:
https://skepticskaddish.com/2024/06/26/w3-prompt-113-weave-written-weekly/
Much love,
David
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