Bleak and weary
Skies of dull gray
A passing storm
Excites with booming thunder
Thrills with lightning flashes
Tired eyes awaken
To vibrant rainbows
Altered version:
Bleak and weary
Rivulets of dull gray
A passing stream
Excites with booming timber
Thrills with liquid flows
Tired falls awaken
Creating vibrant rainbows
W3 Prompt #163: Wea’ve Written Weekly poet of the week, Kim, prompts us to write a poem and modify it in whole or in part, using http://www.spoonbill.org/n+7/.
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Lovely transformation—gentle, fluid, and full of motion. The shift from storm to stream brings a quiet kind of magic. A calm spark wrapped in poetic rhythm.
Philo
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Thank you, Philo! 😊
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Welcome, my friend.
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Jen, I ended up using lines from versions 11 – 15 to avoid too much cross over from the original… This however makes perfect sense!!
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Thank you, Val! 😊
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Very well done Jennifer
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Thank you, Sadje! 😊
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You’re welcome
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These are both excellent poems Jennifer and they work so well together as they link and contrast. Well chosen phrases and ideas!
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Thank you, Kim! 😊
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Beautifully expressed!
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Thank you, Amy! 😊
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I love the shift from a storm to a stream with the transformation. Both end on a lovely rainbow. Wonderful take!
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Thank you, Sarah! 😊
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hi, Jenn 😍
Just wanna let you know that this week’s touching W3 prompt, hosted by our wonderful Sheila Bair, is now live:
Enjoy❣️
Much love,
David
P.S. I’m sorry I hadn’t commented on this post before – there’s been a lot going on in my corner of the world of late…
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I like both versions! ❤
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Thank you, Carol Anne! 😊
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